Dear Alicia What an amazing piece of writing. I think you have achieved many things: - writing from an eagle's point of view, using time connectives such as by the time I got home, describing the rabbits as dead and stiff and finally writing using correct punctuation. Please make sure your mum and dad comment on your blog.
Hi i like the way you added the color of the eagle and made a big story about it from kelan
ReplyDeleteDear Alicia
ReplyDeleteWhat an amazing piece of writing. I think you have achieved many things: - writing from an eagle's point of view, using time connectives such as by the time I got home, describing the rabbits as dead and stiff and finally writing using correct punctuation. Please make sure your mum and dad comment on your blog.